Deleted Scene

Thursday, January 31st, 2008

As a little extra bonus for today, I thought I’d include a page which didn’t make the cut for the comic. The following rough sketch was actually one of the first pages I had written for the whole sequence of the kids up in the clouds. I really liked the way the sequence brought out Zip’s Shadow’s character and thought it would be a nice page but I wasn’t sure how copyright stuff worked for song lyrics, so when I was writing it down, I looked at it as kind of a throwaway page. There weren’t any important plot elements revealed in this page, nor did it move the story from one scene to another, so I wasn’t concerned if I didn’t end up using it. In the end, I actually had more than enough content to fill up the story, so this page was one that I went ahead and did without. I hope you like it anyway, though:

Sample Rough Page

Panel 1-1:I’ll fly away, O Glory. I’ll fly away.

Panel 2-1:When I die, Hallelujah, bye and bye. I’ll fly away.
Panel 2-2: “Hey, stop that singing!”

Panel 3-1: “What’s the matter, Mr. Shadow? It’s just a song about flying.”

Panel 4-1: “It’s not about flying. It’s about what happens to you when you die.”

Panel 5-1: “Are you afraid of dying?”
Panel 5-2: “Of course I am. I’m a shadow.”

Panel 6-1: “I don’t think you and I are going to go to the same place.”

“I’ll Fly Away” copyright Albert E. Brumley and Sons/Hartford Music Company

7 Responses to “Deleted Scene”

  1. Serena Says:

    I love the deleted scene! Thank you for posting it.

  2. Richard T Says:

    I do too, especially the singing.

  3. Trade Says:

    Thanks guys. Ha! I think everyone is liking the deleted scene more than the actual comic. I can’t get frustrated about that, though, it is a really nice song. And I like how the scene shows Mr. Shadow as a bit vulnerable.

  4. Schwa Says:

    why does this story confront my mortality

  5. Trade Says:

    Hey Schwa! I think it’s important for good children’s literature to confront young readers with the idea that their lives are someday going to end, preferably in a horrible and graphic fashion. Don’t you? ;)

  6. mike Says:

    i love that song!

  7. Trade Says:

    Ha! I knew you’d like that one, Mike. :D

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